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I am sad,

My sadness is filled with anguish,

My anguish is filled with despise,

My despise is filled with jealousy,

My jealousy is filled with anger,

My anger is filled with love,

My love is filled with you.
©2006-2009 ~Electro-Mix
:iconelectro-mix:

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My first poem!

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:iconcheramyn:
Ahh, linking things, very clever, this has a good rhythm and a nice pattern, good job! :+fav:

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I was born too late, to a world that doesn't care, oh I wish I was a punk rocker with flowers in my hair

Visit my prosy account of prose [link]
:iconlupyne:
One little thing that I thought disrupted the flow of the poem was the capitalised letter on 'Jealousy' and 'Anger'. The other words weren't capitalised, so I thought it looked a little weird. Just my opinion, though...

But all in all, this is a great poem! Definitely a favourite for me.

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If transform is to change your form, then does transparent means changing your parents?

"The thing about most of you youngsters these days is: you don't know enough to know that you don't know. . . you know?" ~ Shawn Michaels
:icondolphingoddess92:
I can't tell you how many times I've felt like this. Bravo! Congrats on your first poem! It was nice. ^^

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If we all received a dime for every time we met someone just like ourselves, everyone would be living in cardboard boxes.
And when he gets to Heaven, to Saint Peter he will tell, "Just another soldier reporting, sir. I've served my time in hell."
:icondragonfriend9:
I like that you continue from example despise to jealousy etc etc. But be careful you don't do that to often or it will get boring.

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Dragons rule the sky, and they are one with the stars.
:iconelectro-mix:
Yea, this was one of my earlier works, I think I've progressed a lot from then.
:icondragonfriend9:
Yes I can see that ;) but it doesn't hurt to have to told

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Dragons rule the sky, and they are one with the stars.
:iconelectro-mix:
of course, it never hurts, thanks for your words. They're appreciated.
:icondragonfriend9:
You're welcome, I'm glad to know you appreciate it

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Dragons rule the sky, and they are one with the stars.

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